Duane’s Fiction

January 1, 2013

Florentine Dragons

This story is a sequel to Teleporter Girl; however it can be read as a standalone story without reading the other one first.

This is a story of a group of high school girls with superpowers living in Jefferson, a small town in southern Minnesota.  At the age of four, when they were all attending the Thatchwood pre-school, an experimental chemical was accidentally released from a nearby biotech firm.  The resulting cloud drifted over the pre-school building killing all three adults present and leaving the girls forever changed.

Their families each carefully hid their daughter’s special abilities in fear that if they were found out, their daughters would be taken away.  Therefore it wasn’t until they were sophomores in high school that they became aware of each other’s existence.

Superpowers should make their lives more fun and easy.  But the danger always exists that if they are caught using their powers, they may be dragged away and caged up like lab rats.  But weird, almost unbelievable things are going on and only they, through the combined use of their gifts, may be able to prevent bad things from happening to the world.

It appears their old nemesis, Professor Amundsen, and his associates may be trying to bring back dinosaurs.  And based on his previous cavalier attitude towards public safety, a lot of people could be hurt or killed if they don’t figure out what he is doing and how to stop him.

And they can’t forget the old Indian prophecy, verified by talking to the ghost of a long dead shaman, which says they will travel back to the distant past to save the world.

As result, it sometimes feels like their superpowers don’t leave them time for the mundane, but important things in life like homework, afterschool jobs, or most importantly – boys.

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I have been puttering along on this story for at least eighteen months.  I write 20 or 30 pages and then set it aside for a few months before writing another 20 or 30 pages.  At this point I have about 180 pages done  and have finally reached the heart of the story where the girls have arrived in 15th century Florence, but it still has a long ways to go – probably at least another 180 pages.  So I thought perhaps if I did some bios for the main girls and selected some actresses who could play them, it might improve my motivation to stick with it and get the story finished up.

It turned out to be a lot harder to figure out the most appropriate actresses for this one than the other stories I am working on, mainly because I discovered I’m not familiar with that many teenaged actresses.  Lots of shows set in high school (Pretty Little Liars and Vampires Diaries come immediately to mind) use actors in their mid to upper twenties.  Since the girls in this story are all sixteen year old sophomores, I really wanted to come up with actresses who are still in their teens to really look like they are sixteen.  Anyway, the actresses below are ones who I am at least vaguely familiar with and who look at least something like the characters in my head.


Elle Fanning (Super 8) as Mackenzie Thomas.

Superpower: Teleportation

Mack can teleport herself and up to two others anywhere in the world in the blink of an eye.  Until her 16th birthday she had never used her gift to travel further than the 90 miles to Minneapolis.  But on that day she traveled all the way to Paris and ended up saving the young son of the head of the Cadeaux Magiques Fashion House.  As a result of that encounter, and coupled with her stunning beauty, she has started a secret modeling career in Europe.


McKaley Miller (Hart of Dixie) as Gracie Denton.

Superpower: Can speak with Ghosts

Unlike in the movies where ghosts are usually rare creatures that only exist when someone dies with serious unresolved issues, in reality everyone becomes a ghost when they die and Gracie (and anyone touching her) is the only one who can see and talk to them.  These literally billions of allies on the other side prove invaluable at collecting intel for the girls when needed.


Skyler Samuels (The Nine Lives of Chloe King) as Alexandra Pearce.

Superpower: Immortality

Alex is the only one of the girls who didn’t receive her special gifts as a result of the chemical spill at the Thatchwood pre-school when they were all four years old.  Instead, Alexandra is the sole survivor of a high-tech civilization that existed 17,000 years ago right at the beginning of the last Ice Age.  A ‘gray goo’ nanotech accident wiped out all the processed metal in the world destroying that civilization and the ensuing Ice Age then removed all traces of its existence.  In the final hours, Alex’s father, one of the leading nanotech engineers, injected her with experimental nanomachines to help her survive during the civilization’s collapse, however neither of them realized at the time that these nanomachines would almost instantly heal any injury, give her computer-like mental powers, and keep her forever looking sixteen.  The downside of forever looking sixteen is that she can never stay in one place for more than ten years without people noticing she doesn’t age.  On the surface, it appears to be a simple coincidence that she was living in Jefferson pretending to be sixteen at the same time as all the other girls turned sixteen, but unsuspected forces may have been involved.


Kara Haywood (Moonrise Kingdom) as Danielle Scott

Superpower: Telekinesis

Danni can move any object or any combination of things up to 256 pounds through the power of her mind.  In addition to moving objects, her gift also gives her the ability to fly (along with another person, if they aren’t too heavy).  Like most of the other girls, she never knew others with superpowers existed until she was a sophomore at Jefferson High.


Molly Quinn (Castle) as Molly ‘Jacks’ Jackson

Superpower: Able to instantly understand, read, and speak any language

Jacks’ father, a minister, intended to announce his daughter’s gift when she turned sixteen.  The ghost of her great grandmother warned Gracie that all of the girls’ secrets were at risk if the announcement was made.  This was the impetus for Mack, Gracie, and Alex to get into contact with the other girls so they could band together to protect their secret.  Jacks has joined the other girls, but based on her highly religious upbringing still believes her special gift is from God and has a secret personal agenda to use their combination of unique abilities to verify the facts and events described in the bible.


Jennifer Stone (Wizards of Waverly Place) as Jill ‘Charlie’ Munroe

Superpower: Sees the patterns that surround every living and inanimate object

Charlie sees patterns in everything.  Occasionally, she gets flashes of insight that allow her to convert this knowledge into useful devices.  The most useful to date are a ‘scrying’ glass made from an assembly of wood, glass and stone that allow the user to see anyone in the world who they concentrate on, and a translating bracelet that allows the user to speak and understand any language.   She has attempted to give herself other superpowers through special tattoos, but these have had only limited success.  Along with her divorced Mom, she is addicted to historical romance novels.


Hailee Steinfeld (True Grit) as Sara Gettinger

Superpower: Able to bend light and sound around her body to appear as anyone or anything she chooses

Sara attended the Thatchwood pre-school with the other girls, but then at the age of seven her family moved from Jefferson to Red Wing, Minnesota.  She is one-half Native American and her father revealed her secret to the Sioux tribal council.  However they believe she truly transforms into creatures like wolves and bears like the ‘skinwalkers’ of legend.  They don’t know Sara really only bends light and sound without physically transforming and that she can just as easily make herself look like other people in addition to animals.  Mack first became aware of Sara when she had to reveal her gift to the tribal elders to get their help in finding a long lost Indian cure.  As a result of Mack’s conversations with the elders, it appears the girls may be part of an ancient Indian prophecy and that time travel to the 15th century may lay in their future.


Annasophia Robb (The Carrie Diaries) as Gail Barrett

Superpower: Ghost

Gail, who died in a drinking related car crash in 1957, is Gracie’s best friend among the world of ghosts and her de facto liaison with many others.  Like all ghosts, she is incredibly beautiful – forever looking like her dream version of herself.  Also like all ghosts she can’t stray more than ten miles from her final resting place – forever trapping her in Jefferson.  Through another aspect of Gracie’s unique gift for communicating with ghosts, she can make Gail look solid and alive for up to one hour at a time.

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Since this story includes time travel, conversations with long dead ghosts, and Alexandra’s incredible long life, I have put together the following timeline of what is currently known to help keep everything straight and consistent.

Distance   from the present (years) Date Important   Historical Dates and currently known facts about Alexandra’s prior life.
0 2013 AD Present
30 1980s Alexandra   lives in Australia under name Elizabeth Penworth
120 1890s Alexandra   is Lady Chatsworth in England
1430-1440 AD Timeframe   when the girls are supposed to travel into the past according to the Indian   Legends and conversations with the ghost of the Sioux shaman Screeching   Crow.  However apparently someone lost   count and the actual date appears to be 10-15 years earlier
595 1418 AD Alexandra   is living in Florence under name Giovanna degli Bicci married to Rinaldo di   Onofrio Strozzi.  Arrived two years   earlier from Rome.  Maid’s name   Alessandra (portly girl with dark hair and dark complexion from Naples or   Sicily)
636 1377 – 1383 AD Alexandra   arrives in Florence in 1377 from Verona under name Lucia della Scalla as   bride of Francesco di Bicci.  Lives in   Florence until 1383 when they and their two children (Polissena and Tommaso)   moved to Avignon, France for his uncle’s bank.  Maid’s name is Maria (fair hair and   skin).  Maria dies in Avignon in 1387   at age of 24 from plague.
1400 600 AD Alexandra   was Alessandra, Duchess of Brescia, in northern Italy.  At odds with Queen Theolinda of the   Lombards (Queen from 588 to 616 AD)
2850 833 BC Alexandra   rules the Olmec Empire in South America (source of the El Dorado legend)
3260 1250 BC Alexandra   participates in the Trojan Wars (on the side of Troy) under the name Ainia   with her two Amazonian friends Ioxeia and Pharetre (both killed in battle)
4500 2500 BC The   height of the first Ancient Egyptian Empire.    The Great Pyramids are built
7000 5000 BC Alexandra   lives in a Polynesian culture in the South Pacific
8000 6000 BC Noah’s   flood.  Deluge refills Black Sea in   matter of days
8150 6150 – 6100 BC End   of Ice Age, Mediterranean refills over fifty years, Fall of Atlantis
8150-8950 6950 – 6150 BC Time   of the Atlantis Empire.  Centered in   the eastern Mediterranean.  Technology   reaches levels equivalent to Victorian England (steam trains, gas lights,   telegraphs and limited electricity)
10300 8300-7900 BC Alexandra   rules an unnamed empire covering most of the Eurasian continent south of the Great Northern Ice Cap.  Thinks she is a god. The Great Sphinx is   created.
12000 10000 BC Time   of the Lemurian Empire.  Centered in   South America. Eloise Dubois, the head of the Cadeaux Magiques Fashion House,   is overheard to be speaking in the long dead language of this Empire.
17000 15000 BC Fall   of Alexandra’s original civilization due to ‘gray goo’ nanotech   accident.  Start of the Ice Age.

I would really appreciate any feedback you would like to provide, if you chose to read this first portion of the story, feel free to leave a comment.

Thanks, Duane


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